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The sweet monster

The bright lights shine up to the tall concrete sky scrapers which lean over the never ending city.The lights polute the dark night sky so you can not see the shining stars in the big world. A non human figure as tall as the masive sky scrapers and fatter than the cube like office blocks tower over the crowds of people below. The huge figure has a smily grinning face as sweet as the marsmallow which he is made of. But the cudly white blob looks like he has been pumped up and is about to explode!!

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Comment 1 Comment by Mr Bailey on 06 Feb 12 at 4:53pm | Quote this comment

That first line is so powerful in creating a picture in my minds eye, a great effort Archie. Love the film choice too! Who you gonna call?

Comment 2 Comment by Mr Ryan on 06 Feb 12 at 7:12pm | Quote this comment

Good try, Archie - I like it! Try to avoid repeating the same vocabulary ('skyscrapers', 'lights') to improve further.

I love the simile for sweetness!

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