Black Beauty

Who am I as the writer? The describer of the scene.
Who is my audience? People who would like to read my description.

Beautiful. Stunning. Light blue, the sky sat there as if it was waiting for something BIG to happen. Something amazing. Something that could blow any humans mind. Candy-floss like clouds hung over the top of the emerald green trees that towered over the old rickety fence. The hills, which were covered with a layer of pasture, stretched out beyond the fence like a carpet of green velvet.

An inky black steed galloped into view with its mane and tail flapping like the wings of a crow behind him. His feet cut through the grass and dug into the damp soil under his feet as his hooves clattered together with every stride he took.

Comments that people have made about this blog post

Comment 1 Comment by Mr Bailey on 01 Feb 12 at 12:59pm | Quote this comment
Anna, you are the first person to address our two important questions - well done.
Comment 2 Comment by Lillie W on 01 Feb 12 at 7:13pm | Quote this comment
Well done Anna for a great descriptive sentence. Well done for putting who am I as the writer, and who's your audience. :lol:
Comment 3 Comment by Edward T on 06 Feb 12 at 8:48pm | Quote this comment
Great work Anna, I like how you've put "An inky black steed" insted of putting "A black steed" well done!!!
Comment 4 Comment by Emily C on 08 Mar 12 at 8:14am | Quote this comment
Very Good Anna, It's a brilliant piece! :lol:
Comment 5 Comment by Lucy B on 08 Jun 12 at 3:11pm | Quote this comment
I like the way you started the words in short sentences. :roll: Keep up the good work! :lol:

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