The Haunted House

Bolts of lightning light up the jet black sky and illuminate the crooked rooftops. Steel iron gates creek open. Menacing gargoyles stare at you as they guard the cobbled path surrounded by the long witch-fingered branches. Broken arched windows glare in the moons beam and warn off any intruders. A golden light pours out of the highest window creating an air of mystery. The enormous oak door stands mighty and proud intimidating those who wish to enter.


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Comment 1 Comment by Mr Bailey on 01 Feb 12 at 12:35pm | Quote this comment
Archie, this is a very impressive piece of writing. By using some great descriptive language and different sentence level features you have enabled the reader to create a very vivid image in their heads. Well done
Comment 2 Comment by Lillie W on 01 Feb 12 at 7:22pm | Quote this comment
Well done Archie. Great sentence starters and personification. :lol:
Comment 3 Comment by Edward T on 07 Feb 12 at 9:50pm | Quote this comment
Well done Archie, I like the way that you have used the word 'intimidating' great work!
Comment 4 Comment by Isobel B on 26 Feb 12 at 7:19pm | Quote this comment
Archie, this is a realy good piece of writing, I like the way you said ' jet black sky'.
Comment 5 Comment by Sarah C on 28 Feb 12 at 7:36pm | Quote this comment
Great work Archie,"long witch-fingered branches" it sounds amazing.If you close your eyes you can imagine the picture. :P

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