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How's me blog scills?!? - Tickle me Pink Or Grow me Green!

CLASS NZ ONLY 

What up Team NZ. Hears ur chance to prove to me that u is well smart and ain't stupid - init! i challenge all you little squirts to post comments about what is well good about this 'ittle blog post (+ what ain't good if you really wanna dis me). c u alls L8er mr Martin jake bailey

ps if you wanna make a change immediately email me direct at This email address is being protected from spambots. You need JavaScript enabled to view it. or just drop us a text on 1234567890987654321. don't forget i'll be a the bark coffee shop at 6:30 tonight if you fancy meet up for a coffee and chat see you all there.

 Good luck

 

Evil Mr bailey

Dear Children of Class NZ, 


It looks like Mr Bailey's evil twin brother has accessed his account and posted a rather unfortunate blog on your class page. Please could you comment (constructive criticism only please) on how he could improve on his posting skills. Remember the rules and expectations that you all agreed on in order to keep us safe and secure on the internet - table points available! Please only provide one improvement/suggestions/alteration each (it doesn't matter how small there are lots of errors).  Make sure you read each others comments so you don't give the same advice twice. Good luck and hopefully you can provide some model comments for the rest of the school to see how it should be done!


Thank you kindly and good luck with your growing green and tickle pink comments,

Mr Bailey

Comments that people have made about this blog post

Comment 1 Comment by Sarah C on 12 Oct 11 at 2:33pm | Quote this comment
Mr M Bailey try not to give personal details on this school web site.
Comment 2 Comment by Oliver H on 12 Oct 11 at 2:36pm | Quote this comment
Mr M Bailey try and put a Capital letter in the firt pargraph next time.
Comment 3 Comment by Jasmine F on 12 Oct 11 at 2:55pm | Quote this comment
Mr Bailey you have spelt 'skills' wrong!
Comment 4 Comment by Isobel R on 12 Oct 11 at 3:32pm | Quote this comment
Mr Bailey an I on it's own should be a capital letter.
Comment 5 Comment by Archie D on 12 Oct 11 at 4:15pm | Quote this comment
Mr Bailey
You said " c u alls l8er " thats not a good example for younger pupils.
Instead you should say things like " Hope you had a nice day, see you later."
Comment 6 Comment by Ben S on 12 Oct 11 at 4:19pm | Quote this comment
Evil Bailey, you shouldn't tell people where you are going because they might follow you.
Comment 7 Comment by Lillie W on 12 Oct 11 at 4:33pm | Quote this comment
Mr Bailey, try not to us text language.
Comment 8 Comment by Jasmine F on 12 Oct 11 at 5:53pm | Quote this comment
No slang Evil Bailey
Comment 9 Comment by Abbie D on 12 Oct 11 at 5:57pm | Quote this comment
Mr Bailey, you should put a full stop at the end of the first paragraph.
Comment 10 Comment by Dylan B on 12 Oct 11 at 6:13pm | Quote this comment
Your not supposed to tell people where you are.
Comment 11 Comment by Isobel B on 12 Oct 11 at 7:09pm | Quote this comment
Next time try not to use slang.
Comment 12 Comment by Ebony J on 12 Oct 11 at 8:02pm | Quote this comment
You should not be un-kind to other people. Calling us 'little squirts' is not very nice. Also it may offend others.
Comment 13 Comment by Jamie C on 13 Oct 11 at 4:30pm | Quote this comment
Evil Mr Bailey remember that all names have capitall letters
Comment 14 Comment by William Sa on 13 Oct 11 at 5:40pm | Quote this comment
Mr m Bailey if you post personal things like phone numbers and addresses because people might come to your house or phone you.
Comment 15 Comment by Anna B on 13 Oct 11 at 6:51pm | Quote this comment
Mr m Bailey you shouldnt say 'what up team NZ' because it is slang you should say something like 'how are you all team NZ'.
Comment 16 Comment by Mr Ryan on 13 Oct 11 at 7:45pm | Quote this comment
No-one's yet spotted Mr Bailey's (not his twin's) BIGGEST mistake. 5TP if you can get it!
Comment 17 Comment by Hetty P on 13 Oct 11 at 7:49pm | Quote this comment
Evil Bailey, please try and use the words want to insted of ‘wanna’.

Mr Bailey you have spelt the word 'others' incorrectly. It should have been like this - others'. Also at the beginning of your letter you wrote "It looks like Mr Bailey's evil twin brother has accessed his account and posted a rather unfortunate blog on your class page" then signed the letter Mr Bailey.
Comment 18 Comment by Mr Ryan on 13 Oct 11 at 8:27pm | Quote this comment
Hettie is very, very close to Mr Bailey's biggest mistake! But she's not quite got it yet...
Comment 19 Comment by Isobel R on 14 Oct 11 at 5:47pm | Quote this comment
Evil Baily you should never ever put a picture of your face.
Comment 20 Comment by Jasmine F on 17 Oct 11 at 4:34pm | Quote this comment
Mr Bailey you are talking in third person not first
Comment 21 Comment by Edward T on 17 Oct 11 at 7:58pm | Quote this comment
You have said here's ur chance try to use your insted of ur.
Comment 22 Comment by Anna G on 18 Oct 11 at 3:48pm | Quote this comment
Mr Evil Bailey, the whole thing is a mistake because it is nothing to do with
the subject.
Comment 23 Comment by Mr Ryan on 18 Oct 11 at 5:51pm | Quote this comment
BAH! Still no-one's managed to identify the biggest problem with Mr Bailey's brother's unfortunate post on the blogs!
Comment 24 Comment by Isobel R on 19 Oct 11 at 3:07pm | Quote this comment
Mr bailey you should never let any one see your login details or password because they could do something like evil bailey did.
Comment 25 Comment by Jasmine F on 20 Oct 11 at 2:54pm | Quote this comment
Mr Baiely you need a full stop at the end of your blog not a comma.
Comment 26 Comment by Rachel H on 20 Oct 11 at 4:19pm | Quote this comment
Evil Mr Bailey you have spelt hears wrong the corect way is heres.
Comment 27 Comment by Lucy B on 20 Oct 11 at 5:43pm | Quote this comment
Evil Mr Bailey its not true that you are going out at 6:30 to Mcwiggs to have a cup of coffee!
Comment 28 Comment by Mr Ryan on 20 Oct 11 at 5:49pm | Quote this comment
ISOBEL R - well done! The biggest mistake Mr Bailey made was allowing someone else to access his account details as then they could post anything they like. 3 Team Points from me.
Comment 29 Comment by Mr Bailey on 24 Oct 11 at 4:42pm | Quote this comment
Well done Team NZ a superb effort. Thank you for all your sensible comments, you are really proving to me that you can use the school website safely and securely.
Comment 30 Comment by Abbie D on 02 Nov 11 at 5:03pm | Quote this comment
Mr Bailey you should not say things like "c u alls l8er" you should say things like "see you later on".

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