Achilles Victory

The immortal walls stood like Mount Olympus.  Pausing, he raised his mighty shield.  An ear-piercing scream sharply echoed.  The iconic figure stood in royalty, glancing at his vibrant golden armour.  His thunderous roar woke the Gods above.  Troy shook.  As strong as mankind, the surrounding walls protected the arena.  Sapphire eyes deeply gazed at Zeus's creation.

"For glory and beyond!" Erupted the undefeatable warrior.  "Victory is at my presence!"

His rock-hard leg lunged forwards whilst shaking the must floor.  It would seem that the well-known figure was ready for battle.  The foreboding atmosphere was intense, more so with every passing moment.  Sweat slithered down the Trojans, while their hands were losing blood.

"War has begun!" Bellowed fearful Trojans, "Take your positions wisely."  Eagle-like eyes gawped at their opponents.  Heart beats thumped slowly.  Dust spiralled in the air as they sprinted towards one another.  Swords travelled through the air.  Who would win this battle?  Heads bounced repeatedly, blades cut through skin like piranhas.  Blood exploded.

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Comment 1 Comment by Mr Ryan on 14 Mar 14 at 7:42pm | Quote this comment
Olivia, I'm stunned as to how your writing is going from strength to strength so quicky. This is a solid Level 5 piece and who knows where you'll end up by the end of the year!

A small tip would be to cut in one or two longer descriptive sentences in there to make the reader wait for the action and build the tension a little.

Please continue to publish this very high standard for us all to read on the blogs - well done!

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