Running Wild (part 2)

Polly tremmbeld while following Black Star over snake-ridden rocks and down a moss path.

"Here we are.Now get to bed its over in the corner" explained Black Star

Pollys bed was in a shadowy corner but with a pile of fresh fish and a saucer of water. There was a little bit of moss to carve neatly her bed.


"Rise and shine Blue Bark its your first day for hunting fish also collecting some water you will be with Red Bark plus Purple Bark"

"okay I will just have my breckfast".

Read part three for pollys training lessons if you dare to find out... 

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Comment 1 Comment by Michelle B on 27 Jan 14 at 10:07am | Quote this comment
Good use of describing words Eloise! :lol:
Comment 2 Comment by Nelly P on 27 Jan 14 at 10:11am | Quote this comment
I love the setting idea, it's really good!
Comment 3 Comment by George T on 27 Jan 14 at 10:12am | Quote this comment
well done good use of adjectives,punctuation and paragraphs.
I realy like the good use of the ellipsis for the cliff hanger. 8)
Comment 4 Comment by Lucy D on 27 Jan 14 at 10:16am | Quote this comment
welldone eloise, this piece of work draws the reader in completely. I hope there's another astonishing piece of work from you! :P

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