Bad things............

 I was breathing heavily. No words could be spoken from mouth.They were coming.  "WHERE IS HE ? " shouted angus. 

Crack went the twigs. Head first, I landed on my back. Cherry-red blood had been oozing its way out of me, then my head began to sting. " Arghh!" Rolling down that hill was not really ideal. I leaned over the river, crystal-clear aqua, I saw my face. It wasnt a pleasure to see.....


To be continued...


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Comment 1 Comment by Mrs Arnold on 06 Dec 13 at 11:01am | Quote this comment
Great writing Olivia. You've created tension in your story from the outset. Your short sentence, 'They were coming,' is really effective.
Comment 2 Comment by Poppy F on 06 Dec 13 at 10:46pm | Quote this comment
Yes i agree, really good i cant wait to see what comes next. :lol:
Comment 3 Comment by Lucy D on 07 Dec 13 at 5:29pm | Quote this comment
great writing olivia! It is really effective :P
Comment 4 Comment by Michelle B on 07 Dec 13 at 5:58pm | Quote this comment
I like your use of describing words Olivia. :-)

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