Lunar disaster! By Hal

Adrenaline pumped around my body as the engines roared beneath me. As the moon seemed to get bigger I remembered that I was about to be the first man to land on the Moon! There were depressingly deep craters and vast heights to be seen all over this heavenly sphere. But it was more than just a sphere, it was another world. But then it happened, I heard a crackle from underneath me and saw a flash of fear in a crew mates eye and I realized what had happened; `THE ENGINES HAVE FAILED!!` I screamed at the top of my voice. I noticed a deepened valley with death written all over it and that we were heading straight for it...


NOTE: This paragraph was inspired by historical events.

NOTE: This has not happened to my knowledge.

Comments that people have made about this blog post

Comment 1 Comment by Mrs Arnold on 07 Mar 13 at 8:25am | Quote this comment
Well done Hal, you've used some great techniques to build up tension. I really like the phrase 'I...saw a flash of fear in my crew mates eye...'
Comment 2 Comment by Mr Jones on 08 Mar 13 at 2:09pm | Quote this comment
Hal, I love this piece of writing! Great first sentence that sets the atmosphere for the rest of the paragraph.
Comment 3 Comment by Hayden B on 08 Mar 13 at 4:04pm | Quote this comment
Great description, i wonder whats going to happen next?
Comment 4 Comment by Mr Ryan on 09 Mar 13 at 1:13pm | Quote this comment
Excellent narrative, Hal. I enjoyed it for its tension and description! 8)
Comment 5 Comment by Leo W on 10 Mar 13 at 12:39pm | Quote this comment
Hey Hal I love it! please continue with your amazing fictional writing?! 8)

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