We have been looking at the Haiku in our English work this week.  The Haiku is a poem that:

  • Has three lines
  • Has 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second and 5 in the third.
  • Does not rhyme.

Can you write a Haiku, to hit one of our Layered Targets?

  • Bronze - Write a Haiku to express a feeling
  • Silver - Write a Haiku which includes similes or metaphors
  • Gold - Write a Haiku that includes personification

Remember that to hit Gold, you need to have also ticked off Bronze and Silver.  If you need any further help with writing your Haiku, check out Teya's blog entry which includes some excellent examples.

Comments that people have made about this blog post

Comment 1 Comment by Oliver D on 11 Jan 13 at 4:45pm | Quote this comment
spring day
A Grand time had passed,
Then a plague of bee's droned through,
All on a spring day
Comment 2 Comment by Mr Jones on 11 Jan 13 at 9:06pm | Quote this comment
Oliver, clever use of the word "drones". You have really captured a mood with this poem.
Comment 3 Comment by Ellie K on 12 Jan 13 at 1:04pm | Quote this comment

Brown leaves falling,
A crispy carpet forms,
Crunching, crunching JUMP!
Comment 4 Comment by Mr Jones on 12 Jan 13 at 1:59pm | Quote this comment
Ellie, like the alliteration in your poem.
Comment 5 Comment by Hayden B on 12 Jan 13 at 4:27pm | Quote this comment

The fire ran wild,
Crackling like a radio.
Terrified, I ran.
Comment 6 Comment by Mr Jones on 12 Jan 13 at 6:13pm | Quote this comment
Hayden, I love how sparsely you have used language in the final line to create a mood.
Comment 7 Comment by Sarah C on 12 Jan 13 at 9:36pm | Quote this comment
Alone at sea

The cruel wind sweeps over,
the small boat timidly rocks,
water falls like tears.
Comment 8 Comment by Mr Jones on 13 Jan 13 at 9:20am | Quote this comment
Sarah, great personification by using the word "timidly" to describe the boat.
Comment 9 Comment by Grace Greaves on 13 Jan 13 at 12:44pm | Quote this comment
Autumn Weather

Wind blew viciously,
trees as strong as elephants,
leaves disappearing.
Comment 10 Comment by Mr Jones on 13 Jan 13 at 8:18pm | Quote this comment
Grace, super ending with "leaves disappearing".
Comment 11 Comment by Jakob HR on 13 Jan 13 at 8:31pm | Quote this comment

The great white body,
the fin cuts through the water,
blood is like platinum. :o
Comment 12 Comment by Mr Jones on 14 Jan 13 at 8:48pm | Quote this comment
Jake, a really interesting simile to say "blood like platinum". You have avoided the obvious choices for a comparison and this has made your Haiku far more effective. I am very impressed :-)
Comment 13 Comment by Isobel R on 16 Jan 13 at 7:50pm | Quote this comment

Snowing heavily,
covering the crisp white ground,
excited children.
Comment 14 Comment by Oliver M on 17 Jan 13 at 8:27am | Quote this comment

ice formed like diamond
hard as frozen stainless steel
the sun melts this steel
Comment 15 Comment by Mr Jones on 17 Jan 13 at 6:09pm | Quote this comment
Isobel and Oliver - I can guess where your inspiration came from!

Isobel, love the "covering the crisp white ground" line. This is a really powerful image.

Oliver, great simile "hard as frozen stainless steel". It is really effective to avoid the most obvious comparisons as you have here.

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