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Why is it me? Chapter 1 by Hayden B and Leo W
Settling down for much-needed sleep on one of the countries most famous landmarks I thought lonesomely about my unsupportive family and how they were getting on without me. Like kids going hyper at a party, unaswered qusetions bounced off the walls in my despairing but devious mind. Had they forgotten me? Had they moved? These were just a few of the numerous questions popping up in my battered head. My thoughts were impeded abrubtly as whaling sirens screeched into the street, many feet below.
As my mind raced into action I franticly scaled the unforgiving walls heading for a beam as thin as a digeridoo leading to the ground where I spotted an unattended motorbike past the line of the robust police cars. I pulled a piece of ragged cloth out of my ever useful rucksack which I tied hecticly around my wrists to use as a zipwire!
"Why is it always me" I muttered exasperatedly through gritted teeth as I ran to the edge and hesitantly leapt off screaming "Up up and away" with my fist reaching heroically out like superman. Whizzing down the wire at immense speed, my frizzy hair flying wild in the wind, I began to realise the enormity of what I was doing. A pair of bloodshot, psychotic eyes belonging to someone I only knew too well seemed to burn smouldering holes through my head as they stared up at me.
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A faint cry of "Up up and away!" was listened intently to by a certain policeman who almost immediately new who it was. After all he had been through a lot, not necessarily all good, with Taylor Smith. Never taking an eye off the person who had ruined his life he jumped on an unused motorbike, blazing with endless anger, and watched his almost certain victim as they jumped on an identical motorcycle and roared off into the winter rush hour. Following the provocative urchin Marvo Flemming set off into the sunset.
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Sweat poured down my forehead like a fast-flowing river. Excessively looking over my hunched shoulder I spotted the sickening sillhouette of the person who had turned my life upside down like it was something that he did every day! How could I get away from him? A narrow dust-covered road appeared around the corner, impulsively I did a sharp turn and hurtled down the secluded road; Lewis Hamilton, my favourite racer, would have been proud! To my despair I spotted a towering brick wall at the end of the enclosed road looming over me. I skimmed my mind for options. What would I do? After a few moments of frantic confusion I spotted the perfect oportunity. Lying infront of the elevated wall, a discarded door lay there propped up as if beckoning me towards it. I had to make the jump to freedom! To make it even more essential I had recently noticed my biggest enemy speeding up behind me a few moments ago. . .
Leave a comment on which one of these you want to happen next:
A: Taylor jumps the wall and carries on trying to find his home
B: Taylor jumps the wall but hides until the activity has died down.
C: Taylor crashes and gets caught by Marvo.
We will write about the option that gets the most comments.
Thank you for all the comments you left last week and we hope you enjoy it!
Comments that people have made about this blog post
I would vote for option A. I would be interested to see where he goes next on his journey home. Furthermore, I think it would build up the tension if we do not find out much more about his enemy (Marvo Flemming) until later in the story.
A brilliant first chapter following your initial prologue, boys. The language and action is superb. I agree with Mr Jones: don't give too much away about Marvo just yet - keep us in suspense a bit longer!
A great example of how a number of writing tools and techniques can be combined effectively to form a gripping opening to a story. Keep it up.
Its just like readind the start of scorpia horizon
Im voting for C: Taylor crashes and gets caught by Marvo.
I cant wait to read the rest!
Its a amazing piece of writing.
Ed.l
and also you could get some good description in!
A)2
B)0
C)3
Thank you for everyone who commented so far!
I'm voting A because jumping over a brick wall is quite exciting!
A)3
B)1
C)3
Wow close so far!
And again thanks to everyone who voted!!
I'd go for (a) next, but I don't want this to be the end of Marvo Flemming... definitely not!
A)5
B)1 (Still only 1! Who else likes B? Don't leave poor Archie on his own!)
C)5
We are hoping to release the next chapter (again) on the last Friday, the 21st, of term.
We will try and make this episode as exiting as we can. But you are very welcome to comment over the holidays and we will make the options interesting.
Please feel free to make other comments about what happens next! E.G: Taylors feeling or skills!!