The man jumping off the house.

The man suddenly catapulted off his house wearing only a skimpy pair of black Nike shorts.As he jumped he heard a crowd of worried people screaming and shouting about what they should do: call an ambulance, try to save him some way or simply move out of the way and just let him fall! Most people moved out of the way and started to scream like a group of children on a roller-coaster. Some quickly removed their phones to call 999 but one woman just stood there in horror, she was a statue.

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Comment 1 Comment by Mr Stanton on 18 Dec 12 at 3:45pm | Quote this comment
Well done Jess - I agree with Grace's feedback regarding the similes, metaphors and descritpive language. Great also to see a range of punctuation correctly used.

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