The Fish-like Man

Bright and sunny, the fiery sun threw shards of glistening light over the mans stretched face. I watched him, like an eagle watching it’s pray, while he trudged through the leaves shuffling them with his dirty rough-looking feet. I caught a glimpse of his old wrinkle-covered face; his forehead was probably the most wrinkles bit of his face, and it had bits of mud and dirt between them as if he hadn’t washed for days! His pursed lips were bright pink as if he had an electric shock…. His long puffy nose was covered in red and purple swelling as though it was a collage. His nose wasn’t the biggest thing on his face because his large black pupils were so dark that you wouldn’t think he could see! As he slowly trembled past me I saw his hunched back swerve and I saw his crumpled face once more. I felt cold air. I saw his chipped teeth; they were as jagged as a couple of mountains. I don’t think he could talk because he kept opening it and closing his mouth like a fish going blub blub blub. 

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Comment 1 Comment by Mr Herring on 10 Feb 12 at 5:39pm | Quote this comment
Molly, another piece of really good descriptive writing. Where do all your ideas come from?! Can I suggest that you enter the 500-word story competition on Radio 2?
Comment 2 Comment by Mr Ryan on 11 Feb 12 at 1:14pm | Quote this comment
I second that, Molly: you should enter the BBC competition. A good piece of character description writing!
Comment 3 Comment by Stephanie F on 24 Feb 12 at 10:21pm | Quote this comment
your writing is soooooo good!
Comment 4 Comment by Molly C on 27 Feb 12 at 7:38pm | Quote this comment
Thanks I don't know if i should enter, I don't do it because I have to, I do it for fun. I love writing it's my best subject. But I might be interested in doing it. I'll have a go

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