Wish you were here?

Our class have been working hard in their literacy lessons this week, learning to write effective settings using adjectives. Lots of their work was collaborative as they worked with their talk partner to produce their descriptive work. We talked about how important it is to appeal to all our senses to help the reader feel like they are really there...

Amelia and Lizzie wrote:

Rose was skipping along the soft, golden sand. She saw the shimmering, sparkling sea wash on the golden shore and there she saw a beautiful shell. Rose picked it up and put it to her ear. She heard the sea washing in and out. Just then she felt the warm water wash in and out on her feet. She smelled sea salt. She picked some up and some of the salt tasted strong. Then she saw the sunset - it was like a golden orange. She had to get home!

We also talked about starting sentences in different ways...

Charlie and Ellis wrote:

Ambling along the side of the shimmering, aqua lake, Sam could see in the distance the grey, rocky mountains. Behind him was the little, ancient village. All around him was an evergreen sunlit forest full of squelchy, slippy mud. He was looking for a rare red squirrel. Suddenly, he saw a long, twisty trail of nuts, leading deep into the creepy forest. His heart was thumping in his chest… had he found it?

How many adjectives have they used altogether? Five team points for the first children who answer correctly!

Comments that people have made about this blog post

Comment 1 Comment by Mrs Sellick on 14 Oct 11 at 4:53pm | Quote this comment
Great settings USA Class - we will share ours with you next week.
Have a good weekend.
Mrs Sellick
Comment 2 Comment by Simon Weston on 15 Oct 11 at 6:08am | Quote this comment
Outstanding and evocative settings everyone ....looking forward to seeing some more. :-)
Comment 3 Comment by poppy on 17 Oct 11 at 4:41pm | Quote this comment
good work charlie. :P
Comment 4 Comment by Sarah R on 17 Oct 11 at 6:25pm | Quote this comment
Really impressive writing. Great use of sentencing and punctuation to add to the effect!
Comment 5 Comment by Ellis on 21 Oct 11 at 7:01pm | Quote this comment
I think me and Charlie used 15 adjectives,
Lizzie and Millie A used 8.

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