One day in a giant sea battle Robin, a small cabin boy quivered in a corner on the flaming deck of his ship. He seemed oblivious to the nails and shards of wood and cannon balls which were flying through the air cutting through peoples stomachs and sawing through their heads the suddenly his ship blew up. Many screams were heard.

Soon after a little fellow called Bob came looking for things to give his rebels and York a chance of beating Lancaster. He found a shipwreck and on that shipwreck was Robin. Bob saved him and they headed for the woods to go to the hideout of Bob’s Rebellion. Suddenly a band of mean looking burly muscular foreign soldiers came rushing towards them. Suddenly Bob pulled out a bow and arrow and shot them.

“Quick” said Bob.

They went to a tree house, when inside they warned the archers and suddenly from all sides they were ambushed by an army bearing the rose of Lancaster. Robin grabbed a crossbow. Soon all the army were killed then suddenly another soldier came and killed Bob.

“No!” cried Robin. The a hundred arrows shot from the bowmen. The soldier fell in agony and died.  After Bob’s funeral Robin was declared leader of the rebellion. Soon after Robin sent the Rebels on an attack. The attack took place at the house of Lancaster. Many people died and half the house of Lancaster fell and squashed a group of monks…..

By Daniel C.

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Comment 1 Comment by Mr Ryan on 23 Oct 14 at 8:20am | Quote this comment

Brilliant, Daniel!

I love the high-impact short sentences you sprinkle in: "Many screams were heard."

The description, too, is a very nice touch: "He seemed oblivious to the nails and shards of wood and cannon balls which were flying through the air cutting through peoples stomachs and sawing through their heads..."

Please share more of your creative writing with us on the blogs this year!

Comment 2 Comment by Henry C on 24 Oct 14 at 9:01am | Quote this comment

Awesome Dan! I loved the squashed monks incident!!!

I can't wait to hear the next bit!

Henry C

Comment 3 Comment by Mr Ryan on 24 Oct 14 at 9:26pm | Quote this comment

....Quoting Rachel C:

Fantastic writing Dan! I love the descriptive language and drama. Mum

Comment 4 Comment by Malcolm Guest on 26 Oct 14 at 12:15pm | Quote this comment

A very descriptive piece of writing. We get the picture of the 'quivering' Robin - so frightened he is 'oblivious' to what's going on around him. We also love the 'mean looking burly muscular foreign soldiers' who didn't last long!

(Granddad and Grandma)

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