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The Creature

Here is my 500 word story called THE CREATURE:

The town was deserted and silent, it had been this way since the monstrous attack. I was not going to disturb it now. My name is Bob and I am nineteen years old and was brought in by the Turkish government, because I have extraordinary knowledge of space and the planets that are in our solar system, and the living creatures that exist there. My task is to hunt and kill the super sized mutant from the far regions of space. The mutant crash landed in a glowing hot meteorite in the town centre, killing all the inhabitants for a three mile radius. The mutant was injured when the hot scolding lump of meteorite exploded on landing, and its right eye was badly damaged. This means the mutant is at its weakest as it is unable to see clearly. All the same, my time was running out, I need to find this creature fast. I spoke too soon the creature is here, it is looking for me and hunting me down, I need to get out of here, but it will get me before I can run a mile. “sniff, sniff” It is here and it wants blood. The creature has blue and green spots with poisoned spikes, like razor-sharp swords all over its body, its right eye is like an erupting volcano, the other feels like it is boring into your skin and creeping down your spine. I admit I am very scared. Its teeth are small but its claws look like it could rip me apart. I have to run as fast as I can, but its got me and blood is coming out. The thing is gone for now but it will be back. I must make my move and get out. Well the thing is still after me and I found the body of a man. I suppose it is another one of its meals. Good news I am in a nearby shack, I am loading up my specialist dart gun with a capsule of viper venom, so powerful and deadly it could spell disaster in the wrong hands. I really have to go soon, but “rustle, rustle” Well I am going to have to face it, I have to... “aaaah.” “Roarrrrrr.” The thing its got me and its claws, aaaah the agony. I got away but the thing is on my case and I have one shot at getting it killed. “ Hey, you fat thing, I have some chicken in my hand.” The creature is limping towards me I can smell its breath, foul and evil like rotting fish. I only have one shot, I take aim, bang! I hit it directly, the creature collapsed onto the ground, it knew it was defeated. Within ten seconds it was gone for ever, back to the planet it had come from.


 

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Comment 1 Comment by Mr Herring on 23 Feb 12 at 6:09pm | Quote this comment
Matthew - you use some excellent vocabulary in your story to describe both the setting and the characters. I love your description of the creature - '...blue and green spots with poisoned spikes, like razor-sharp swords all over its body, its right eye is like an erupting volcano, the other feels like it is boring into your skin and creeping down your spine.' Brilliant writing!

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