Don't Forget...

....school term ends on Friday 15th December at 2.30pm

Tuesday at 3:42pm

Stella Ekelzur trembled as she crept through the tall, dark trees of Zilo forest, her dagger held ready in her sweaty hand. All the time she was looking cautiously around for any sign of Shadoes that might feel the need to re-capture her after she managed to escape from Styx Court. She had lost her magical map which would tell her where the three other Hopes of the Xzelo tribe were, and was utterly lost in the heart of the dangerous forest. As the hours passed, Stella became more and more tired, and soon settled down inbetween the roots of a large, gnarled oak, and allowed the silence to swallow her up. Just after she’d gone to sleep, the sound of twigs snapping and cloaks dragging through dry autumn leaves echoed round the gloomy forest, waking her with a start. She peered into the depths of the darkness and could just make out four or five menacing silhouettes slowly moving towards her, looking around for something… or someone. As they approached, Stella could make out more and more of them and soon realised what the cloaked figures were: Shadoes! She quickly jumped up and started running for her life, dodging trees and ducking under low hanging branches. As soon as the Shadoes noticed her they started going faster and faster, and it was all Stella could do to keep ahead of them. Her legs felt like lead, and she was slowing down, but she kept on tearing through Zilo until she felt she could sprint no more, but she still carried on. Stella glanced over her shoulder to see how close they were – a big mistake - and tripped over a thick root. She hurriedly turned around and backed up, but, to her despair, found a firm tree pressing hard against her back. The Shadoes were just a few metres away from her now and there was no way she could escape. “There’s only one thing for it,” she whispered to herself, and closed her eyes. Stella concentrated on the sun and the burning hotness that it emitted. She concentrated on the Shadoes and on the ground in front of them, and felt a tingling sensation in her arm. It grew more and more painful until it positively burned her, and she sent all that pain to her hand and her eyes flew open. She hurled the fireball she had formed at the Shadoes and blew them up instantly killing every single one of them. She got up and started running for all she was worth, she had to get out of this horrible place, she had to find the other Hopes, and to do that she needed Old Ebenezer…

Comments that people have made about this blog post

Comment 1 Comment by Mr Ryan on 19 Mar 12 at 8:17pm | Quote this comment
WOAH! :eek:

Sarah, do we have Chapter 1 here of a masterpiece? You had me clinging to your every word. I love your structured use of sentences like:

"She hurriedly turned around and backed up, but, to her despair, found a firm tree pressing hard against her back."

and...

"She peered into the depths of the darkness and could just make out four or five menacing silhouettes slowly moving towards her, looking around for something… or someone."

Just a quick note/query - do you means 'shadows' or are these a work of your fiction? And paragraphs, naturally, would make this even better.

Please ensure there is a Chapter 2, 3, 4, 5... 8)
Comment 2 Comment by Mr Herring on 20 Mar 12 at 8:01am | Quote this comment
Sarah - this is a fantastic story! Absolutely superb writing, where your brilliant vocabulary and understanding of high level punctuation shine through! Well done! I eagerly anticipate the next instalment.
Comment 3 Comment by Mrs Fowles on 20 Mar 12 at 8:05am | Quote this comment
Brilliant Sarah, I was completely hooked! Great suspense and atmosphere, I felt I was actually there in the forest with Stella. Can't wait to read the next instalment...
Comment 4 Comment by Sarah L on 20 Mar 12 at 12:47pm | Quote this comment
Thanks everyone, and Shadoes are a work of my fiction. P.S. this piece of writing is just the prologue :P !
Comment 5 Comment by Mr Ryan on 20 Mar 12 at 9:19pm | Quote this comment
That will teach me to not read all of the title properly!

CONGRATULATIONS, Sarah, you are the only person to so far have 2 pieces of writing on the school's 'WRITING WALL'.
Comment 6 Comment by Lucy T on 22 Mar 12 at 5:58pm | Quote this comment
Wow sarah! You hooked me from the start its so gripping and i cant wait to read the 1st chapter!

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